Reviews on "The Course of True Love Never Did Run Smooth" by hpboy13

• Written by vodkaholic on chapter #13. (May 26th 2008, 5pm) this was a cute story! i liked it! Author Response: Thank you very much, I'm so glad you liked it! Just so you know, your reviews totally made my evening, thanks so much for all of your kind words!

• Written by vodkaholic on chapter #9. (May 26th 2008, 5pm) hahahaha wow, they must have negative points, yeah? Author Response: I'm guessing so, unless Hermione was being particularly assiduous in class that year. Then again, Snape's no longer around to dock Gryffindor points, so who knows? ;)

• Written by vodkaholic on chapter #7. (May 26th 2008, 5pm) I love how McGonagall has such lovely timing!! I like this bit and how it has all escalated from nothing! Author Response: I know, isn't that so typical of authority figures? They'll never walk in when you're doing your work like a good little boy, only when the fists or spells or swearwords (whatever the case may be) start flying. And isn't that how all great soap operas start - with a little misunderstanding escalating into epic proportions? Thanks for the great review!

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #10. (May 17th 2008, 12am) Heehee. Heehee. Sorry, I can't stop laughing! A suggestion would be to say what the Howlers said, just to add to the hilarity of it. Also, I don't think that Ginny would "say" to Ron. She would most likely be speaking in a menace voice. And, you didn't say that Mr. and Mrs. Weasley's Howlers came! But, when Ron writes the note, I think that you should make it a bit more dramac, just for fun. Good job, though! Author Response: It's okay, laugh away - it's good for your health! Okay, there's my good deed for the day. ;) You're right, I probably should have written what the Howlers said...though maybe that would've been a tad too much profanity. And I see your point in Ron's note being dramatic, but I thought it'd be funnier if it was like "Oh, hey, FYI, Ginny dumped Harry and is doing all this shit with Dean. Kay, bye!" And Mr. and Mrs. Weasley probably woudln't send her a Howler over this; I dunno abotu you, but I get the feeling they'd want to reprimand Ginny for her sexual exploits in private. Thanks for reviewing! P.S. Go see Prince Caspian, it's incredible!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #8. (May 15th 2008, 12am) I agree with your last answer to my last review. And wow -! You're doing great on Harry said, Ron said, and all that stuff. It's looking pretty good :) The only thing would probably be when Ron says "WHAT?!?" ... I would suggest that Ron shouts, unbelieving instead of saying unbelievably. Also, Dean and Seamus are reminding me of Crabbe and Goyle?? Speaking of which, is there going to be any of C&G encounters here? :) - lily_evans Author Response: Well, statistically speaking, we were bound to agree on something! Glad you appreciate the effort I made to please you...2 years ago, that is ;) Dean and Seamus are a bit like Crabbe and Goyle, only usually far mroe likable. I've always seen them as a "hey, we need generic characters to populate Hogwarts" type of duo - the difference is, they're usually on Harry's side, which makes htem much mroe likable. As a matter of fact, I try to set at least Dean apart (as evidenced in HP

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #7. (May 11th 2008, 9pm) Cute :) The only thing I would say is that the Weasley's & co. should try to protest with Professor McGonagall that Hermione did something. Author Response: If they tried to protest, then the Harmonians would have called them on their bit of unfairness. The one rule in wars inside schools is that authority should never get involved!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #6. (May 11th 2008, 8pm) Hmm .. pretty okay. *grins* When Luna is talking, I think you should add: Luna explained serenely, ^ It'll make her character stand out more. Again, same thing as HP and the H. Colin said, Padma said, Ginny said, Hermione said. Add some more flavor to make characters stand out more! :) Also, there's a mistake here. Detention was without magic, so how did all THIRTEEN teenagers fire spells? Wandless would be pretty hard ... And 'The two girls glared at each other, Ron said, “Well our side has reason to be skeptical about the trustworthiness of your side.”' ^ That should be: The two girls glared at each other AS Ron said, “Well our side has reason to be skeptical about the trustworthiness of your side.” Overall, okay chapter but can be pretty good if small things are fixed! - lily_evans Author Response: Yeah, I ind it fairly hard to write Luna in character, btu she's my fave character, I can't bear to exclude her! And though the detention was without magic, the teens still had their wands with them - Prof. McG isn't as mistrusting as Snape, but that won't happen again! And thanks for these typos, I'm going back and fixing them.

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #5. (May 10th 2008, 2pm) I think that this was also one of your best chapters. The only thing would be that when the three couple or lip-locked, they should panic and try to pull each other away. It would at to the overall hilarity, but isn't necessary. Author Response: Wow, you're in a really good modd lately! Yeah, that actually would have been a good thing to add...hmmm...

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #4. (May 9th 2008, 11pm) Really short, but pretty hilarious. First of all, the fist fight should've been MUCH more detailed and longer. and also less childlike .. I see a mistake too. ".. punch each o0ther" should be "other". Isn't the spell McGonagall uses IMMOBULUS? I think that's what it is, anyway. And when she yells at them too, it should definitely be in CAPS to make everything more plausible. Muggles should be capitalized. Also, you should definitely describe each character and HOW they speak and their reactions too. It'll give soo much more. Overall, good job! For this piece, it's mainly the little things that need work. Author Response: Okay, since it's a movie spell, we cna't really say, but I always heard immobilus with an "i". Thanks for pointing otu the errors, I'll change them presently. If this were a seriosu story, I'd agree with you that the fight needed a lot mroe detail, but as it is, I think a short "they punched each other's guts out" will do. Anyway, huge thanks for all your reviews and helpful comments - i"m glad that in this fic it's the little things, since those are easy to change!

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #3. (May 9th 2008, 10pm) Hahaha! Funny ... When Ginny's yelling, I really think you should use CAPS. It would really bring out whatever she's saying. And perhaps you should italicize slut, just to sink the meaning in. For future references, it's Room of Requirements. With an s. :) When Hermione speaks at Ron, I think that Lavender should try to interfere, only to be pushed aside. Great job on this ! Author Response: Um, no, it's Room of Requirement. And I really prefer not to use CAPS, since it's a pain in the butt reading that way. I thin exclamation points suffice! And I don't know about Lavender, but I was under the impression that NO ONE dared interfere in a R/Hr fight. After all, she didn't rush to his rescue when he was attacked by canaries. Thanks for the great comments! :D

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #2. (May 9th 2008, 10pm) You know ... Ginny would NEVER cry. She's too strong for that, so the revenge getting part is good. Also, when "Ron cringes inwardly" I think that you should use a different phrase since Ginny does the same thing. Just so that it isn't repetitive. This was short, but I suppose in a good way. Again, KEEP IT UP! :D Author Response: Well, actually, I drew deliberate parallels between Ron and Ginny (I'll keep doing this throughout the story, it's interesting to know how similar things are, but each has its own unique thing). And you're right, Ginny probably wouldn't cry - which is why I didn't spend much time on her grief and moved right along. Thanks for the review!

• Written by lily_evans on chapter #1. (May 9th 2008, 10pm) You know that this would probably be AU? Whatever. :) Can people get into the RoR if another person's already in there? I mean, Harry couldn't do it to go in where Malfoy was in HBP ... And when Ginny sings (the italics) I think that it should be lined. It isn't necessary though. Anyway, I think that this is really good, and you seem to be better at short things the long things :) Keep it up! Author Response: Um...thanks, I guess. I've never been a big fan of short stories, and wrote this one just for fun, but apparently it works for me! And I don't see how it would be AU - nothing's drastically different (in fact, this could fit in nicely right in the middle of HP

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #2. (May 6th 2008, 12am) omg, this was soo short! keep writing! Author Response: Aye, that it was! In contrast with "Harry Potter and the Horcruxes" and most of my other fics, this fic will have a bit over a dozen chapters, each a few hundred words long! Since it's not supposed to be a detailed or serious story, I think this way is better - that, and it amps up the suspense! Huge thanks for reviewing!