Reviews on "Memento Mori" by Lexie-H
Written by lily_james461 on chapter #2.
(June 22nd 2008, 5pm)FABULOUS!!! I thought it was so sweet that he was telling the Viel--where he thought his parents and friends were--about his problems.
Written by lily_james461 on chapter #1.
(May 4th 2008, 8pm)Wow, short chapter...but very interesting that that's your take on what happened when James and lily died. Really, I personally can't wait to read the rest!!!
lily_james461
Written by grayx3eyesdsoul on chapter #1.
(April 22nd 2008, 8pm)Update please!
Written by aesweeti85 on chapter #2.
(April 8th 2008, 5pm)Harry just about breaks my heart in this chapter...poor thing.
I find it really interesting, the idea that both can hear each other, and that Harry was listened long enough that he can hear what they're saying every once in a while. Very, very cool.
I'm excited for more of this story! Keep up this fantastic work!
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(March 29th 2008, 5pm)
PirateSmile on chapter #1.This has a very promising start, and I look forward to reading more. A quick note on formatting, though - it would be a lot easier to read with paragraphs. From the looks of it, you tried to format it that way and just need to get used to the UR system.
Author Response:
Thank you so much for your review! I've just posted up the second chapter if you fancy it =) and yes - the formatting was a little out, but I've gone back and fixed it up. Thank you for pointing that out, I'm sure it'll take me a little while to yet used to UR, yes. Thank you so much once again! Lexie
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.
(March 28th 2008, 11am)I think that you have a nice story line, but there are a couple of things.
First, I think you should separate this into more paragraphs, so that it is easier to read.
Then, I would put more detail of where they were, and not just mist. (Ex. "swirling mist", floating above their former home)Author Response:
Thank you very much, I'm glad you're enjoying it! The mist is explained later, so it's a little ambiguous for a reason. Thanks anyway, I really appreciate your feedback!Lexie