Reviews on "Life Is Not A Fairytale, Even If There Are Unicorns" by lily73190
Written by vodkaholic on chapter #6.
(July 8th 2008, 8pm)I love this story [; can't wait to see what happens next!
Written by Anonymous on chapter #5.
(March 31st 2008, 2am)well, two things... the chapter has been posted twice and there's just a few spelling errors. other than that, despite being on the shorter side, it was pretty good!
_vodkaholic
Written by Anonymous on chapter #4.
(March 31st 2008, 1am)I'm so lost. i like the idea, but i'm really lost.
first you have something going on in lily's early year with james and remus.
then the next chapter you go off onto something with snape.
and now you're already at the summmer before 7th year.
what's going on???!! its all over the place and really confusing.
if i may, i'd like to give you some advice - most authors crave it.
stop what you are doing now and just breath. sort out your thought before writing. read over your ENTIRE story so you make sure it flows and connects. i hope this helps.
think about what i said. use it if you wish.
blue_jeansWritten by vodkaholic on chapter #3.
(March 21st 2008, 1am)It's a decent sort of background, I like it. It short and quaint, but fits nicely. sorry to hear about your computer! Can't wait for the next chap!
Written by Anonymous on chapter #3.
(March 21st 2008, 12am)okay... i'm so lost. you go from having lily and the gang running to snape's past.
sorry but i don't get it.
i would take your time and get yourself organized before you start writing.
i did like this though. its good writing just random and out of place.
sorry to hear that all your itunes are gone. i don't think i could like without mine. (:
blue_jeans
Written by vodkaholic on chapter #1.
(March 20th 2008, 1am)ahh this looks awesome! can't wait for more!
Written by lilyconrad on chapter #1.
(February 28th 2008, 6am)Very cute! I am curious as to where you will take this so update soon:)
LC.Written by Anonymous on chapter #3.
(February 23rd 2008, 9pm)i did go back and read the first chapter.
what i thought was confusing was that i didn't understand what the whole thing with lily's wand and what was really was going on with that. i didn't understand the hole part with remus. he was there and one mintue he's coming back. when did he leave?
idk. to me if felt like it was all over the place and i didn't really understand the whole part with the soap and stuff. why did sirius choose that spell? why did he miss? - i don't take him as someone who would miss. it just seems like you added details that weren't important to the story - the plot. btw what happened to that? the second chapter didn't really seem like it flowed with the first one.
idk. i like this fis chapter and how it ended the first time, but i think the stuff you added on really brought it down. it seemed like the writing style and voice changed to something that felt like you rushed to write.
i think my advice would be too slow down and take your time. think of what really james and them would do when they found lily (i liked how they thought snape had something to do with it thought. really brilliant)
i don't care if you take my advice or listen to me. and i'm not telling you this to be mean or tell you your story sucks because it doesn't. i liked where you were going with this. i'm looking forward to seeing what you do with it.
i like when people tell me what they think of my writing so i thought you might like that too.
good luck with your next chapter. update soon.
blue_jeansWritten by Anonymous on chapter #2.
(February 23rd 2008, 7pm)hmm... i was a little confused on what was going on and what was happening... but it was still good. (:
blue_jeans
Written by blue_jeans on chapter #1.
(February 23rd 2008, 2am)brilliant! i love your title!! very creative.
this sounds like it's going to be really good! plese update soon!!
blue_jeans