Reviews on "Breathe Me" by 
andromeda311
Written by strawberry on chapter #7.
(September 8th 2008, 2am)I love this fic. I love your portrayals of Andromeda and Ted, but especially andy. And the first scene with cissy in the owlery was perfect, it sounded like such a good sisterly conversation. your dialogue throughout the entire fic was very well written, and very real/life like. i hope you write some more andromeda stuff, becuasae she is such an interesting character and i would love to read more about her. and i think your one of the few authors who could actually make it good. thus, i hope you plan to write some more!
Written by xx_audrey on chapter #7.
(August 7th 2008, 5pm)Wow this is really beautiful. I really like the way you've portrayed Andromeda- she WAS a Black, and you wove together her ancestry with her own views perfectly. Well done, this is amazing writing.
xx Audrey
Written by Anonymous on chapter #7.
(June 16th 2008, 3am)i read this listening to Breathe Me. I LOVE IT.
LOVE IT.
its so beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Ok. My favorite part was how you weaved the story of two usually overlooked characters into a very plausable plot- you paid so much attention to detail in the outside world, like the rise of Death Eaters and the actual scariness of it all that so many fics seem to gloss over to focus on cute romance. This was absolutely stunning, keep it up!
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(June 6th 2008, 4am)AnotherDreamer on chapter #7.This was wonderful. I suppose by now that you should expect me to start all my reviews for your stories that way, with declarations of awesomeness. But this was another example of you using everything that you do best--characterization, heartbreakingly honest moments, inner dialogue--in the very best ways. I loved the use of lengthy parentheticals. You really helped us get inside Tonks's head. I loved that she couldn't read his mind, which he thought was a very good thing. I love that he fell in love with her across the room.
Andromeda was a Black girl. One of the three.
You made Narcissa very, very real. I enjoyed that she was young, wanted nice things, and was angry enough to threaten, but not to kill. Her big sister was her biggest threat. I loved that Bellatrix wa sa specter in this story, haunting.
And young Sirius Black was a delight. Small, young, mischievous. But still a Black. The scene where Andy makes him apologize was one of the best. As was the fact that Ted hung out with Sirius only so long as Andy was there.
(He thinks, then, that if anyone in the Black family ends up being disowned, it'll be Sirius. He's too rebellious, too wild, too passionate. If they don't accept Andromeda, they'll never accept him.)
That was one of a series of very good quotes form this story. I hope to erad more from you soon.
Miranda
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(May 15th 2008, 4pm)
ChristyCorr on chapter #7.Adorable! Agh! I love it. *grins* Your Andromeda is so vulnerable and yet -Black-; it's brilliant.
(Although I do think the lyrics go 'unfold me, I am small and needy' instead of 'and fold me.')
Written by ShIvErInG_sMiLe on chapter #7.
(March 25th 2008, 5am)I avoided reading this fic 5 times because I had read the word "Cissa" and thought this was a Lucius&Narcissa fic and I was just not in that mood.
Boy, was I greatly surprised.
I'd never, ever read about this couple. I've always liked Andromeda and DH only made me like Ted better. Just as it begun, I knew it be good and I wasn't disappointed in the slightest. Even if the character wasn't important on the fic, you gave them dimension. The pace, I can almost say texture of this story was amazing, what a great feeling.
You really did something amazing here, congratulations on the spectacular job!
Written by vodkaholic on chapter #7.
(March 20th 2008, 2am)awwwe this was so romantic!!! i loved every part of it!
Written by shoelacy on chapter #7.
(March 18th 2008, 2pm)Oh, this is just a perfect ending. Great job. :] I loved this fic.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #7.
(March 18th 2008, 1am)lovely ending. really lovely.
wonderful job on this! your really an amazing writer! great job.
blue_jeans
Written by shoelacy on chapter #6.
(March 16th 2008, 12am)Oh, this chapter is just fantastic. I absolutely love your characterization of Ted and Andy and this ship is so refreshing in the midst of all the other ones on this site. Great, GREAT job. I can't wait to read more. :)
Written by Anonymous on chapter #6.
(March 16th 2008, 12am)love this story! (: really brilliant!
update soon!
blue_jeansWritten by shoelacy on chapter #5.
(March 7th 2008, 12am)There aren't words enough to say how much I love this. =] Great, fantastic job.
Written by shoelacy on chapter #3.
(March 6th 2008, 4pm)If you've never gotten hopelessly smashed while suffering from the effects of the strongest sleep potions your body can physically handle without descending into coma, Ted thinks, you haven't really lived.
That made me laugh out loud. I think my roommate thinks I'm crazy. Great fic! :)
Written by blue_jeans on chapter #5.
(March 5th 2008, 3am)god i love this. is just so amazingly good. (:
"Mother Smugness Meter: Unbearable." - how in the world did you come up with this!? it was hilarious!! lol.
love this. update soon
blue_jeansWritten by Anonymous on chapter #4.
(February 4th 2008, 11pm)i love this story! prefect sirius behavior! lol.
wonderful. update soon please! (: try not to forget!
blue_jeansWritten by blue_jeans on chapter #3.
(January 29th 2008, 4am)AH! this is so good!! (: love it!
are you going to write more? i think you should. it's really really awesome!!
brilliant.
blue_jeans
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(January 2nd 2008, 7am)
insanguinare on chapter #3.Ack, I love this chapter! I can't remember whether I've read any humour before, but this is grand. Most of what you write is quite serious, and while it is amazing, this is a nice change. :)
Written by Anonymous on chapter #2.
(December 28th 2007, 8am)I haven't read very many Ted/Andromeda fics, but you have certainly intrigued me. The dynamics between the two ... well, I hadn't really ever thought about it, but I can see it happening just like this. And I can see significance behind it. Sometimes, stories have plots that are interesting, but there doesn't seem to be a point. With yours, I find it beyond entrancing. I'm pretty much glued to each paragraph, but also, I can feel a lot of emotion behind a lot of the passages. It makes me feel like this really changed both of them.
The style you use, was a nice combo between thought-provoking and a casual approach. It's easy to relate to Ted; you can see exactly how he sees Andromeda, yet you're left with a sense of something else bubbling under the surface.
You write the dialogue perfectly. I especially love the argument that went on between Ted and Andromeda. The sarcasm and insults were absolutely perfect. You also portray the different characters very well. With the scene on the train, you allowed for a small glimpse into the interactions with Lily and the Marauders, but it wasn't overemphasized, because they aren't really the point. Still, you portrayed Sirius rather well.
Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. I hope you post the next section soon. It was disheartening, seeing that no one took the time to review, so I thought I'd drop you a line. Thinking, maybe, this will ... encourage you to update soon.
=] Thank you,
S. Smile
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