Reviews on "Oh What a Tangled Web We Weave" by 
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Written by lily_evans on chapter #1.
(February 12th 2008, 8pm)hi! i thought this was really confusing, but intriguing. keep writing! xD
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(December 22nd 2007, 7pm)
Grimm_Sister on chapter #1.That was a beautiful piece.
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(December 17th 2007, 9pm)
thirty2flavors on chapter #1.Oh, I quite liked these. I am something of a sucker for drabbles and these were all executed quite well with great diction and phrasing and all of that good stuff. My favourite, I think, is the one with George -- the way he lies and the way people eventually stop asking is very realistic and sad at the same time. I also liked the one where Remus is unsure of whether or not he'd be able to make the same sacrifice as Lily. As I glance over them now, I realize that I liked all of them, really, and so to avoid being redundant I'll just say that. The only one that didn't really resonate with me is the one paralleling the Trio and the Marauders. The comparisons are ones I've seen before in fanon, but they've never struck me as particularly apt, I guess. Hermione is more involved and willing to tell of Harry and Ron than Remus was, Harry, for all his looks, is very little like James except perhaps a hero complex, and while Ron is the slightly insensitive joker of the group, he doesn't seem nearly dark enough or reckless enough to compare aptly to Sirius. I realize that you perhaps didn't mean it in that much depth, it's just that I have seen this comparison several imes in various fanfics and I don't think it's really too legitimate. I did, however, like that Remus notices there is no Peter, and considers that both wrong and right at the same time.
Very nicely written. T.S. Eliot is love.
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(December 17th 2007, 1pm)
DianaPrallon on chapter #1.*is heartbroken*
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(December 16th 2007, 11pm)insanguinare on chapter #1.You know, I think I know who wrote this, the style is quite familiar. Whether or not I am mistaken, though, I love it. There are no words to describe how, or why... the moments are so perfectly captured.
Written by Sunset on chapter #1.
(December 16th 2007, 10pm)That was simply amazing. I've never read something like this. When the names are posted, your profile will be the first I visit. Though the little confidence I had about my story has just vanshed reading this. It was truely great!
Sunset
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(December 16th 2007, 5pm)AnotherDreamer on chapter #1.This was amazing. Amazing. I love the snapshots. You managed to cover such a wide variety of subjects and topics while not getting melodramatic. You ahve specific images with specific people in mind. The reveal about the first one being Tonks came to me with the second Remus one. It's heartbreaking, the way you follow their family from start to end. I love the imagine of Andromeda holding the baby and wanting him to make her daughter alive and wanting to scream because she knows it's not possible. I love that she links the story of tonks and Remus to the one of Bellatrix and Sirius floating in the lake. This is the story of families that fell apart: the Blacks, the Lupins, the Weasleys (who lost a brother even as they regained Percy). And the way the survivors deal with it. That image of Teddy going to the grave after everyone was asleep was especially touching. He couldn't keep going back, but couldn't quite explain why.
I also loved this line: "There is no Peter among Harry's friends, and this seems both absolutely right and terribly wrong to Remus."
I love the idea of the survivors looking at the world in a way no one else can. Everyone from Remus remembering his own generation to Teddy who never knew his extraordinary mother or the turmoil his father felt at his birth.
Wow. Just wow.
Bill looking over the dead bodies and not crying. The battle that rages on while the dead lay as if asleep.
I loved the way you broke up the sections with the parenthetical words of a prayer and then with the reptitious "this is the way the world ends"..."not with a bang but"..."with a whimper." And you chose t have the last in italics, which was clever.
Love the mirroring of Sirius in the lake, a disapointed boy thinking about his brother and drowning and just letting go contrasted against Regulus being violently pulled under unnatural water and killed. Neither of whom wanted to die. It was a heroic death, but it was lost to history. A whimper.
I could keep babbling forever about this. Wonderful job, whoever you are.
Miranda
Written by obsessed_much on chapter #1.
(December 16th 2007, 5pm)this was lovely and heartbreaking. Great job!
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(December 16th 2007, 3pm)
Crystalline on chapter #1.First off, can I say I am marginally offended by your comparison of Ron and Sirius? I can se where you're coming from though *laughs* But I can't help but be unable to related sexy, broody Sirius, with loved, awkward, Ron. Don't mind me though. I'm just a rabid Sirius fangirl. And a Ron hater.
I did love the section that comparison came from, that all the Marauders were there, present in Harry's group, excepting the one gone bad. The second generation managed to fix what the first couldn't, and I love the symbolism of that.
I also loved that in her last moment, Bella wanted to say sorry to Andromeda - but didn't. It's so fitting of her. I love the Black family and their quirks. I enjoyed reading this :D I bet Runi's pleased with it.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.
(December 16th 2007, 7am)Whoever wrote this, I love you. I'll post a better comment when you actually post it under your own name.
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(December 16th 2007, 5am)Merle on chapter #1.This was really beautiful. I love how you decomposed the poem and how you kept the verses connected through the drabbles. I loved the Hermione is Remus, Ron is Sirius, Harry is James and Peter is no one. George's was awfully good, as well.
This was increible.
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