Reviews on "The Not-So-Secret and Completely Manly Diary of James Potter" by newyorkcitycop

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (July 10th 2008, 5am) i absolutely love what youve done with this. really its fantastic. im serious. ive been looking for a good fic from james pov for awhile now, but ive had a lot of problems finding one. for one, most ff writers are girls and obviously relate easier to girls so they write it from lilys pov. second, if you do find out from james pov, he is so god damn annoying and lovestruck that i cant read more than two seconds of it before wanting to kill myself (or the author, more like). seriously, i think that BOTH lily and james had to change, but not even change. just mature! obviously everyone changes from the age of 10 to 13, 13 to 15, 15 to 17, even 17 to 18. each year you have new experiences and you become a different person!! and i dont understand how pple make james this lovestruck person, but then hes suddenly the most wanted boy at school. like seriously, no he would be considered a gross stalker- and someone more along the lines of peter!! and come one hes a teenage boy! what about the hormones hes not gonna ignore every girl for a girl who doesnt give him the time of day! youve done a fantastic job of capturing the teenage years of boys- with the porn and the cussing and the stupid fights. and im SOO glad that james goes out with the other girls that like him! it said he was a hearthrob (or something of the like) and it just doesnt make sense for him to "keep" him self for lily. and also im glad youve managed to portray lily as cool. i hate all these pple you paint her as an uptight prick her last year and thinks alcohol is the sin of the devil. like first, she had to losen up if she was going to date james potter. and second, being responsible doesnt mean that you think alcohol is the sin of the devil. i would know, im a perfect example of someone who is a top student and responsible and all that nonsense but does enjoy a good drink every now and then. and lastly, i like your sirius a lot as well. i htink youve characterized him really well, making him fun loving without being the childish and annoying person that other authors have made him out to be. my one complaint with sirius- when does he run away from home? i thought it was sixth year, but its been a while since i last read the hp books, so im really just hazarding a guess. sorry for this really long rant about how annoying some writers are, but i just have to get it out of me lol really i have only two complaints with your story- one i dont really like the drunk writing. for two main reasons: 1) its hard to follow. its kind of annoying to read, cause you have to sort of figure out whso talking and what not (although i do realize this is from a way earlier chapter but you asked) and 2) youve written this as if james is actually writing it at the given time, so i sincerely doubt james is at a party drunk and writing in a journal. my second complaint is the narcissa snog(s)- james is too loyal a friend to ever want anything to do wit hthe blacks, both because of sirius and what they represent. by the way i LOVE the georgia nicolson style. its one of my secret favorite books, and youve really captured her style. although i know she always talks about being a lesbian in teh books, i dont think james and sirius wouldve actually snogged in real life, just cause its different for guys, but hey it works in the story and it fits with georgia so ive got no scruples with it. anywyas again i absolutely LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE this. please say youll finish it sometime soon.

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #5. (June 18th 2008, 9pm) uhm. hello. i'm just saying that there's only thirty days in june.. ha. i figured you'd like to know. the story is hilarious, by the way. -bree.

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (June 16th 2008, 9pm) Hey :D look, she's right. I mean, the story's great. It's sooooo funny :D I love it

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (June 11th 2008, 7pm) Hi. I can't help but notice a few things: A) You haven't updated since January--triste ! and B) You consistently ask for constructive criticism and the like but most of your reviews are more along the lines of "OMFG that was sooooo funny and brilliant!!!" Let's be honest. This story is verrrry funny and verrrry brilliant, so your reviewers were correct in saying so. But you want constructive criticism and if it will help you update any more quickly (it *is* summertime, you know), then by God, you will have it. Firstly. I suppose I haven't much of a right to Britpick, not being British myself, but as James is and as this is his journal, you might consider spelling in Oxford English (that's what it's called, right?): color/colour hospitalize/hospitalise, and in case for any reason you need to spell out the letter "z" it would be "zed" not "zee." It would just add a touch of authenticity to the journal style. I do like your use of British slang and such. It makes James seem... you know, not American. When I hear his voice in my head he is decidedly British. I also noticed how there was very little detail involving Eva in this version (there was more in the old version, wasn't there?). In fact, in general it might serve your comedy well to play up the polarization (polarisation) of James' "positive" relationships and his "negative" ones. For the moment that would leave Susan hilariously stranded in the middle somewhere. Of course, this needs to be done tactfully so that it doesn't seem like an amateur and poorly-written thing. This really is a very good piece of work. I myself have been absent from the world of fanfiction for a very long time (longer still than since your last update), but I came back to this site specifically to read your fic. I do hope you will continue to post chapters because it would be a great loss for you to leave this brilliant and extremely original piece of work hanging in limbo. You update, I'll give you constructive criticism. I promise. -Elaine

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (February 12th 2008, 10am) The whole story is F****** funny!!!! well done

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (February 10th 2008, 10am) Write more- it is so funny

• Written by thefatlady44 on chapter #11. (January 20th 2008, 11pm) omygoodness, you have no idea how much this story cracks me up! i especially like Remus' reactions. please update soon!!!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (January 19th 2008, 4pm) *gasp, gasp* Snape's Harem! Ahahahahahahaha *gasp, gasp* Anyway, I love it so much it makes me weep!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (January 18th 2008, 6pm) Absolutely excellent and hysterical and I looooved it. Reading this always makes my day. Thank you :)

• Written by Pheonix_Feather on chapter #11. (January 16th 2008, 2am) They are like toddlers or something, and I am the unwed single mother, and Peter is the newspaper always lying on the table but never touched, and whenever we pass it we stare and say “Why is that old newspaper still there, it is from last month,” but we can never be arsed to throw it away because we are too lazy. Mum and Dad just got back from the Caribbean, and all they got me was one of those hideous “My parents went to the Caribbean and all they got were those sad little braids in their hair even though they are quite elderly, and then as an afterthought this shirt for me even though I will never wear it in a million years and they know it but it’s all for appearances so that when Dad’s idiot work mates come over they can force me into the shirt and trot me out and point and say ‘Look what we bought ickle Jamie!’” I AM NOT ICKLE NOR IS MY NAME JAMIE. CHRIST. hahahahahahahahahahahaha

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #1. (January 14th 2008, 2am) I can honestly say this's the single most entertaining first chapter of a story that I have ever read, ever. Drunken James writing in his manly diary definitly made me choke on the milk I was drinking just now and cackle like a loon for longer than is sanely acceptable...cheers, mate this was a great read. I'm gunna go find some napkins now...

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (January 14th 2008, 12am) Haha! I was just thinking about this story the other day and then you updated! Good chapter I can't wait for the next so update soon please!

• Written by blue_jeans on chapter #11. (January 13th 2008, 8pm) LOL! "I am a god among men!" hilarious. i laughed sooooo hard you don't even know. brilliant!! amazing job! update soon. blue_jeans

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #11. (January 13th 2008, 10am) oh. my. goodness. HILARIOUS! jamie is such a prat but i love him. can't wait for the next!

• Written by insanguinare on chapter #11. (January 13th 2008, 7am) Oh, my lord, the ending line is utter win. "I am a god among men!" -- Brilliance. I loved this chapter. Good timing, too, I just re-read the whole story the other day and was wondering when an update would come along. Can't wait to see what happens next! James is such a lovable asshole.

• Written by ronislove on chapter #11. (January 13th 2008, 6am) Okay, in order to have some substance to this review, I picked out my favorite of favorite parts of this chapter. So: "USUALLY WHEN SOMEONE DOES NOT GO INTO DETAIL REGARDING THE WHEREABOUTS AND/OR DAILY ACTIVITIES OF HIS OR HER SIGNIFICANT OTHER, THAT SIGNALS THAT THEY ARE IN A PHYSICALLY AND EMOTIONALLY UNSATISFYING RELATIONSHIP. EXCUSE ME FOR BASING MY SO-CALLED “ASSUMPTIONS” ON FACT AND SOCIAL CUSTOM."--WIN. I love it and laughed out loud and for so long that I almost peed in my pants, not that you really needed to do that. I like the changes that you've made with the whole Lily/James situation, however. The last bit made me cringe a bit; it's not as if I needed to know that part, but it was funny nonetheless. I hope to see another chapter soon!

• Written by Tasoula on chapter #11. (January 13th 2008, 5am) This is honestly one of the most side-splitting, laugh-out-loud funny stories I have ever read, not just in HP fanfiction, but in life. I don't think a chapter has gone where I haven't laughed hysterically, at several points, at just about everything James and the Marauders (and supporting cast) do. This fic inspired me to go out and read the Georgia Nicolson books and, to be completely honest, sometimes I think yours is much funnier. James and his thoughts, although crude and pervy at times, lend themselves to such unbelievable humor that, sometimes, I'll just be walking down the street and think of something like, "SHE LOOKS LIKE A LEPRECHAUN. ONLY TALL AND FOXY. AND WITH BIG TITS" and just start hysterically laughing at this kid and the way his mind works. Or, in French class, the moment my teacher mentioned Albert Camus, I had to stop myself from saying to her: "“You poor bastard. You outrageously pretentious son of a bitch..." I really do adore the story and, although I know there can't be that many chapters left because it's already up to seventh year, I hope you can make it last just a little longer for the many fans. And the only thing I would ask for, if it's at all possible, is part of a chapter written by Sirius, since Peter and Remus have already had their turns (Remus' was *amazing*) and I think his attitude would make for some awesome story-telling.

• Written by boldaslove83 on chapter #10. (January 11th 2008, 2am) It would be lovely if you'd update this story sometime in the near future. I really enjoy it quite a bit! Don't rush yourself, I just think you need to stop being so hard on yourself and realize that there are many fans of this story out there. Give yourself a little more credit :)

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (January 2nd 2008, 11pm) UPDAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATE!!!!!! *throws head back and screams*

• Written by obsessmuch on chapter #1. (December 8th 2007, 1am) Okay... just give me a few moments so I can get my breath back... This was just too fucking funny! You said in your Author's notes that you don't like this story - seriously, do not worry. I would pay money for this fic! It's just too hillarious. And you get all the characters completely and utterly... just, guh. James in particular. I've always loved him in a embarrassingly fangirlish kisnd of way, and the way you get him here is just perfect. Arrogant, immature, hillarious and completely and utterly ADORABLE! And the arrogance of Sirius, and Remus' condescending affection, and Peter's all round patheticness. It's got a slight sadness about it, too, because you know what happens to James because of Peter. And I love the drunken entries! And the parties! I really loved the entry Remus wrote in the last chapter. Anyway, my point is, UPDATE SOOOON! You could give Louise Rennison a run for her money, and that is no mean feat. This is BETTER than the Georgia books. I've seen so many people try to take them off, but no one has managed it until you came along with this... this... work of GENIUS! I am now going to pimp this fic out to everyone I know.

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (December 6th 2007, 8pm) You are an amaaaaazing writer!! I LOVE this story, seriously!! So freaking funny!! I love the parts when James and Sirius snog! lol They should do that more often!! Update soon, pleeease!!

• Written by gitgit on chapter #2. (December 5th 2007, 2pm) LEt me tell you THAT was hilarious you have a knack at it .... lol tissue tits and the fondling and 1984 ... lol im still laughing awsome job!

• Written by gitgit on chapter #1. (December 5th 2007, 2pm) ahahahahahahah i really loved the snogging part between sirius and james quiet hilarious :d

• Written by Pheonix_Feather on chapter #1. (November 25th 2007, 11pm) Ive read this a million times and reviewed anonymously but i now have an account and had to come back and tell you AGAIN how i'm in love with this...update soon please!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (November 11th 2007, 4am) lvoe the story!! but sorta confused about the order of things etc and when the heck did james have sex?

• Written by blue_jeans on chapter #10. (November 8th 2007, 11pm) lol. i love this chapter! (: "SHOULD KILL YOU and remus says: take it easy and i say all right." lol. i love love love that!! great job! i don't know why you don't like this! its really amazing!! update soon!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (November 8th 2007, 10pm) this was a great chapter and i loved it! i'm very very heartbroken that you don't intend on going past the next three chapters! i love this story! you're an amazing writer!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (November 8th 2007, 10pm) hahahhahaahaha poor jamesies!

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (November 8th 2007, 8pm) You are a fucking lunatic (a) for thinking that this fic is not very good, (b) for hating this - as well as basically all the other - chapters, and (c) for ending this in THREE CHAPTERS TIME. Seriously. Fucking, raving lunatic. YOU. ARE. AN. AMAZING. WRITER. It's true. Just get over it already. You're amazing. Stop hating on this story and DON't END IT.

• Written by Anonymous on chapter #10. (November 8th 2007, 4pm) hahahahahaha! I love this story I'm always thrilled when I see that it has been updated, I'm going to be so sad when it's over, are you sure you won't make more than three chapters? It's really a brilliant piece of work. Update soon Kristin