Reviews on "Social Niceties" by ChristyCorr
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(July 11th 2010, 10pm)
Absolutely excellent. I think I read this a year ago, and I appreciate the piece even more now. Well done, seriously.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(June 30th 2010, 1am)
This was great. I love the change in POVs, we get a little of what they both are thinking. Awesome job.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(April 27th 2009, 9am)
I really like this! I love the way you write =) Finally a good fic after ages!
Written by ShIvErInG_sMiLe on chapter #1.(March 25th 2008, 10pm)
This was not only great but original. I like the pacing and the way you made it so "classy" to call it something :D
Written by samuraigurl1213 on chapter #1.(February 13th 2008, 5pm)
It's quite a lovely fic, filled with all sorts of fun vocabularly words and Christmas cheer- and most of all, some Lily and James niceties.
Written by rockcandy on chapter #1.(August 24th 2007, 4pm)
Aw.That was really sweet-ish..btw i want to know abt the "hilarious tale of a particularly vicious sprig on a killing spree"...
Written by mystery_spell on chapter #1.(July 2nd 2007, 8pm)
Wonderful story! A cute beginning to L/J's true love :)
Written by rubytuesday on chapter #1.(June 26th 2007, 11pm)
I really enjoyed this. I loved the style, and the tone was effective, and the parenthetical bits - perfect.
Adding to my favorites. So very nicely done!
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(May 17th 2007, 4am)
awwwwwwww!!!!!! this is too tooo tooo cute!!! love love love love it!!! wish there were more!!
Written by loonymoony8 on chapter #1.(May 11th 2007, 11pm)
Haven't been here in a couple days, but now I have and I've found your story/one-shot. Very well written I'd have to say. And it's amazing. I like the thing with the parentheses, a really creative and smart idea, I think. [= Great job.
Written by DianaPrallon on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 6pm)
Seems that UR doesn't know me anymore /o\
You're fanfics are going through such a crazy path that I'm almost afraid of what will come next to that -- and SPECIALLY to bouncing ferret. xD
Meh. Happens. Aren't they just? Yep. I've sent that one to my beta already.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 6pm)
Who cares about social niceties anyway? Get her drunk, get her to the only room left (almost) empty, build up a tension, don't get to the end of things, and BE HAPPY. xD
Lily does, obviously. *grins* *snorts* Riiight. Where have I heard that before?
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 10am)
He is a teenage boy, all hands and eagerness
Probably one of my favorite lines ever. Thanks.
Aw. This fic was born from two lines: one generated the title; that is the other one. :)
Written by AnotherDreamer on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 6am)
I think that this was so clever. I love the way you played around with punctuation. The parenthesis could have gotten repetitive and contrived, but they didn't. You managed to create a nice rythm with them, keeping the story going and vacilating between three different points of view (his, hers, and the narrator's). I love the switches
He may or may not think he's dreaming. She smiles at the thought. It's flattering to think that she means that much to someone.
I like the subtly of this Lily, teh softness. She isn't arrogant, but she can still acknowledge what she means to him and be flattered.
He was once told that love was a pure, chaste, and constant feeling; the concept is irreconcilable with the urges he feels now, even though he has come to acknowledge his obsession with her as some sort of love. Sure, he knows she's the one he wants for the rest of his life, but why can't he desire her as well? Perhaps his love is simply not as innocent as others. It might have to do with being an teenager.
I love the tone you use throughout, detached, sort of. I love that you keep them both very young throughout, unsure, grasping at straws, pretending, trying to figure everything out. James doesn't even know exactly what to call his feelings. And I love that they're a bit drunk and working together.
He wonders whether she'd mind terribly if he ignored the interruption, and guesses that she wouldn't. He doesn't anyway, simply because he knows her well enough to guess that such an action could disappoint her. He cannot afford to lose her, not when he is so close to having her for good.
That makes me ache. You really did a great job showing here exactly how their strange relationship could have made him grow up, learn patience. He's knows he's close and he knows her well enough to know her reaction to his own actions. It's a nice acknowledgement of the fact that he really understands something about her, even if it is just something small. It shows that he doesn't just like the idea of her, that he knows her better than that. I love that he was sto busy enjoying her to be arrogant and that she, unlike he, guessed incorrectly about his reaction to this exchange. That was really great, showing that he knows her better than she knows him.
She beams, having already wrapped her mind around the fact that she is now with him. It's an odd idea, but it will become something of a given soon enough.
I like the omniscient feeling of the narrator. out of time. Or at least, like he is jsut looking back on the events from a later date. I love that they become something of a given. And I love the bit baout this story getting lost. Because it doesn't really matter. And I love that you ended with James asking her to Hogsmeade.
Really well done,
It's a relief to hear that--I was afraid that they would become repetitive. Yay! What an awesome review, Miranda--Lauren's totally right to have spotlighted you in her essay. *grins* I'm glad you liked it... honoured, really! Thank you so much!
Written by Anonymous on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 6am)
This is one of those stories that, while reading it, you can't help but to smile and giggle to yourself. And hense get weird looks from people who think you've gone quite mad simply because you are smiling and giggling to yourself. I love it.
Aw. Thank you!
Written by the_adjective on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 3am)
This is fantastic! I love all the stuff in the parenthasis. Great job!
Written by KMK on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 2am)
Oh that was really sweet! I'd love to see a sequal if that's possible...
*frowns* I can't say I have considered the possibility, but who knows? Maybe someday.
Written by mische on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 2am)
This is truly amazing writing.
(And I love the parentheses.)
It was all-around enveloping, circling through and between teenage hormones and sweetness. Thanks for a lovely read.
*laughs* Aw.(Thank you.)
Written by bluetomatopasta on chapter #1.(May 8th 2007, 12am)
YAY loved it! It was tension-y without being too highly rated (as it did take place on a stairwell, after all), and you still had the awkwardness there.
I absolutely loved it...nicely-written romance and stuff, but here are a couple of things I took (minor) issue with:
the POV switches, and then it switches again, and in some ways it was nice because it was sort of like the story kept circling them and their emotions, but it was also a little bit confusing the second time around.
And, it seems as though the kiss came about sort of quickly. Obviously, the story revolves around this one event, but I feel like there could be more sexual-tension-buildup in the flashbacks you have (somehow, it should be well-established that Lily is accepting what's happening).
So, anyway, that's my stab at constructive criticism...I'm doing my best to follow the Owl Post article about concrit.
But YAY wonderful.
Mm. Yes, the kiss did come sort of quickly, but Lily did accept what was happening soon enough. I'm sorry the POVs got confusing! This fic absolutely didn't want to be written in any other way. Ooh, I'm glad you liked TOP! :D