Reviews on "Puzzle Pieces" by 
thirty2flavors
Written by Anonymous on chapter #51.
(May 21st 2010, 3am)Several of these are good, but this is my favorite - such a brilliant dramatic scene. Fantastic. (I found your work through the Hourglass Awards website.)
Written by Anonymous on chapter #55.
(January 17th 2010, 11pm)I'm sure this is nothing you haven't heard before, but you really are a very talented writer. Possibly my favourite Marauder fic author of all time. This chapter is just heartbreaking. I hope you keep on writing :D
Written by Anonymous on chapter #55.
(January 17th 2010, 11pm)I'm sure this is nothing you haven't heard before, but you really are a very talented writer. Possibly my favourite Marauder fic author of all time. This chapter is just heartbreaking. I hope you keep on writing :D
Written by emers123 on chapter #19.
(May 14th 2009, 12am)I love this chapter!
Written by Madelynn on chapter #54.
(September 24th 2008, 7pm)Simply fantastic. I placed it immediately, and still read it twice more. I had forgotten that lne in the Shrieking Shack, but my, isn't it a lovely bit of foreshadowing.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #27.
(February 23rd 2008, 8pm)Lol, omg that was downright bittersweet and cruel
Written by Anonymous on chapter #54.
(October 1st 2007, 6am)Oh God.... I really really never put this together... Oh God.. Sorry, I am not a native English speaker, so never really read Mcbeth, so completely missed the title and its significance. But this puzzle piece fitted like a glove anyway..
-phoenix4eve
Author Response: I'm glad you liked it. To give you a brief background, the line 'out, damn spot!' is said by Lady Macbeth after she's driven mad by guilt (for assisting in the murder of the King); she is trying to wash the blood off her hands and can't get one particular spot off her hands, which is why she says "Out, damn spot!" Of course there actually isn't any /real/ blood on her hands, she's just crazy, but yeah, that's where the title comes from. =)
Written by Anonymous on chapter #55.
(October 1st 2007, 3am)tears honestly streaming down my face. i hate you for being so damn good at this.
Author Response: Thank you...? Haha. =)
Written by blue_jeans on chapter #55.
(October 1st 2007, 3am)this is good! love this one!! (: everyone needs an escape sometimes....
update soon!
Author Response: Thanks! Heh, poor, poor Sirius is so very depressed.
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(September 30th 2007, 4pm)
ThundersShadow on chapter #54.ok, first -- LOVE the Macbeth title; it fits perfectly!
and second -- after I read DH, I never once thought that Lily's death may be why Snape hated Sirius so much (especially before we found out Sirius was innocent).
I love when you open my eyes to the different possibilities. :)
Sam
Author Response: Haha, yess, Macbeth! Once I'd written the line about bloody hands I just couldn't /not/ mention Macbeth. And really, if you read those two or three pages over again, it makes a lot more sense; I always thought Severus was a little, um, overenthusiastic, for someone who just hated his childhood rivals. There's a line there about a "mad gleam Harry had never seen before" in Severus' eyes and, well, if it's a mad gleam of "omfg you killed Lily" it makes a lot more sense than "omg you used to make fun of me :(".
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(September 30th 2007, 3pm)
Grimm_Sister on chapter #54.Oo...
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(September 30th 2007, 11am)
WinglessFlight on chapter #54.Jesus, Kali. Don't break my heart.
That was FABULOUS. Probably my favourite drabble of yours ever, ever, ever.
'Give me a reason to do it, and I swear I will.
It never occured to me that, of course, we are finally given a reason: that he's not merely trying to avenge a schoolboy rivalry, but real, true love.
the last pair of hands stained with Lily's blood
Just emphasizes the idea that so many things could have swung either way for the Potter's, that so much affected the final outcome, and that just reminds of the tragedies.
Oh my, Kali. I am in awe.
Author Response: Why thank you, Angel! I think the idea came up somewhere on the forums some time ago, and this suddenly occured to me. Rereading that scene, it makes a lot more sense post-DH. =) And it's true -- it was a complete combination of (bad) luck that got them killed, really.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #54.
(September 30th 2007, 1am)Oh! I never even considered that. But it makes so much sense. I love the whole concept behind this one. It makes the whole scene so much more intricate and intense. I love that you identified Snape's hatred for Sirius because of Lily's death and not personally.I love the line "the third party, the traitor, the last pair of hands stained with Lily’s blood." and the incorporation of the quote at the end was wonderful. This whole piece is so strong and I can't seem to find anything negative to say about it. I'm really surprised too, because although I can understand and somewhat relate to Snape now, I was never really fond of him. Yet you were able to write a piece from his perspective that I absolutely adore.
amazing.
Author Response: I'm glad you liked it. It's one of the few things I've written from Severus' point of view, because though I love the character, he's very complex. If you reread this scene in POA knowing what we know now, it seems to make much more sense -- Severus always seemed sort of disporportionately angry before, I thought, and now... well, precisely, as you said, the hatred is in part a personal "you were my childhood rival" thing, but I think it's safe to say it's 95% hatred for the person who betrayed Lily. =) Thanks for you review.
Written by blue_jeans on chapter #54.
(September 30th 2007, 1am)okay kind of conconfused on whos talking, but i lloved the last line!
Author Response: Severus is talking; it's a line directly from POA, Chapter 19, "The Servant of Lord Voldemort". He's threatening Sirius -- Sirius rushes him after he ties up Remus, and Severus says "give me a reason to [kill you] and I swear I will". I.. was sort of hoping it'd be obvious, to be honest. Heh.
Written by danchinh on chapter #54.
(September 30th 2007, 1am)nice, like always
but isn't the quote, give me a reason to NOT do it?
I'm not really sure, as I don't have the book in front of me, but I just wanted to say.
good job :)Author Response: No -- it's "give me a reason to do it", as in "if you give me a reason to kill you, I will". He's threatening Sirius. =) Thanks for the point, though, and for reviewing.
Written by RiriRavenclaw on chapter #54.
(September 30th 2007, 1am)I've never thought of it that way and i love that you did. Sev wants to kill Si because he is and third and final piece of the people that murderd Lily. you are so brilliant and i love you forever. that was freaking brilliant.
Author Response: We had a discussion about it in the forums post-DH -- about what Severus must've thought in th Shrieking Shack -- and we came to the conclusion that his intense hatred was probably largely because of Lily's death, not just childhood rivalry. So I can't take all the credit for the idea. But I'm glad you liked it =)
Written by blue_jeans on chapter #53.
(September 29th 2007, 11pm)this is brilliant!! (: wonderful ideas and well written! (: amazing job!
keep updating! can't wait until the next one!
Written by Anonymous on chapter #53.
(September 28th 2007, 8pm)I find it absolutely incredible how you can compose your writing in a way for it to be so...heartbreaking. I find that emotion can kind of be lost when writing with someone else's characters, but this...I can barely articulate how wonderful I think this piece is.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #53.
(September 28th 2007, 5pm)You are a simply incredible author and this entire fic is amazing. Truly - you deserve congratulations.
Every single chapter had been wonderful but this...THIS is just beautiful.
You captured this so well.
(I would say 'Well done', but that would be an absolute understatement)
Written by Anonymous on chapter #52.
(September 28th 2007, 3am)beautiful
i love your drabbles
full of imagination
only you could think of this :)Written by Anonymous on chapter #52.
(September 26th 2007, 8am)ooh...I want to say something intelligent about it...but I'm too blown away by the idea. The sentiment. It's an incredible thought and I love the characterization behind it. Well done.
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(September 26th 2007, 4am)encrypt on chapter #52.I have to disagree with the last review -- the "twelve years later" followed by "thirteen years later" worked quite well. loved this piece. it's just such a fresh concept -- this collection is so excellent because what you present is NEW. good good good good. =D
Written by Anonymous on chapter #52.
(September 26th 2007, 3am)I really likd the first sentence of this one. The contrast between celebration and grievance is striking and understandable. The irony in the fact that he was wishing for Voldermort's return while the others celebrate his defeat; it's insightful in the way that you incorporated the stars. Though, I felt that there was something slightly ... off about the pairin of the two words "venomous bitterness". I'm not sure if it's just me but that's how it felt, a little rough, not quite so smooth. Also, it was a little weird how you said "Twelve years later" and then "Thirteen years later", a little unclear. But I do like how you listed out all the little facts, "Peter has been alive all along, Sirius is innocent, and Harry Potter’s Patronus is a stag". It seems as though he feels like he does get them back. And your last sentence sums up Remus so well, the little nagging guilt he always has around him.
Thank you. =]
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(September 26th 2007, 3am)lilydarling on chapter #52.Obsessed.
That's really all I can say.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #51.
(September 15th 2007, 5pm)I must say, this upsurge in stories about Lily in the Order in love with James and fighting Snape is lovely. Thank you for contributing to it. You write absolutely beautifully and I always enjoy reading whatever you decide to post.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #51.
(September 14th 2007, 6pm)Good LORD, Snivellus disgusts me SO MUCH!!!!
He is SICK, SICK I SAY!! IN THE HEAD!!!
Okii, he is in love with someone who is SO ABOVE HIS LEAGUE, its not even funny. Theyre like, SPHERES away, PLANES away. Not even TOUCHING. Opposite sides of the universe.
And then, the sick, DISGUSTING creature that he is, he will willingly *KILL* (underline that twice) *ANYONE* (underline that too) if they come in between him and Lily, whos not even his, and everything ended in between them, she cant care for him any more, since hes such a sick bastard.
EWW, and he wonders WHY Lily doesnt love him? HA! *snort*
Okii first off...YOU'RE A DEATH EATER, AKA, YOU KILL PPL LIKE HER FOR YOUR OWN MASOCHISTIC PLEASURE!
Second, you are SICK, DISGUSTING, CRUEL, EVIL, MEAN, VICIOUS, TWISTED, NOT RIGHT UPSTAIRS, if you get my meaning.
Third, you're goddamn ugly, just--JUST STAY AWAY!
*shudders*
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Hehe, rant over. But what I said was true. How she could have ever liked him was beyond me. JAMES ROCKS!!! *squeezes him*
And, once again, you're writing is magnificent. Keep up the excellent work. ;)
~Baby Green Eyes =D
Written by Karen on chapter #51.
(September 14th 2007, 10am)Wooow. I totally mistook this WHOLE thing when I was reading. I thought this was about HARRY, and Snape was imagining Harry as James, and how he had wished this would have happened after school, haha, and I thought Snape mistook Lily for Ginny... and yeah, haha. Wow. But now I know it really was Lily and James.
Anyways, love allll of the chapters! They are fantastic, and amazing. I wish I was better a reviewing...
KarenAuthor Response: Hahaa oh my that would be incredibly confusing. It did occur to me to use 'James' instead of 'Potter', but as it was narrated by Severus, it seemed ...wrong... to go by James' first name, haha. =) Anyway glad you liked them, even if this last one was a little confusing.
Written by Anonymous on chapter #51.
(September 14th 2007, 4am)This was truly wonderful; I've used that a lot to describe your writing, but it is simply wonderful. I loved the line "a Shield Charm would not have absorbed a Killing Curse, but her body certainly would have." There's just something so strong about that for me. And I really like the first line; it just seems to set the entire tone. Something about it makes me think Snape thought a lot about this scene, like it just lingered there all the time. And I really liked how Lily didn't hesitate, while Snape did. I just never thought Lily could like Snape; it always seem one-sided to me. And the ending, his confusion is so understandable, like after all this time the fact that Lily left him for James is obviously very hurtful. You captured the sense of regret and devotion and the sorrow of unrequited love so beautifully.
Author Response: What I found most interesting about the entire Snape plotline was that he was desperate to save Lily's life, but he was perfectly okay with the idea of James and Harry being killed. I think it's a pretty grand statement about his personality, the intensity of his love for Lily, and the intensity of his hatred for James. I think he probably would have thought about this scene a lot -- given a second in the right direction, he could have killed James, and saved Lily's life (in that she would not have had Harry and so wouldn't have been killed protecting him), but given another second the wrong way, and he easily could have killed her. That, and of course Lily's action is clearly born out of the most selfless sort of love, and the fact that it's love for James would've infuriated him beyond all reason. As for Lily -- she does not know it's Severus, neither her nor James know who the assailant is. I was going to have a line about nonverbal spells but it seemed cluttered, so I cut it, but anyway, he's masked and isn't speaking, so he's just a nameless Death Eater in their mind. (Granted, I think Lily would have Stunned him anyway, if she figured he was going to kill James, but in this instance she is unaware.) I think Lily may have known without a doubt that he was a Death Eater, but I don't think James (and by extension Sirius, Remus, Peter, etc) knew, judging by Sirius' statements in GOF. In any csse, I'm glad it got across what I was going for, and thanks for a detailed review. =)
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(September 9th 2007, 7pm)Anna_Karenina on chapter #50.These drabbles make me happy. They just do.
Your insights make everyone so perfectly human. (Not too mention mocking J.k.'s ridiculous family tree . . .Kudos.)
Author Response: =) Glad you liked it. I'm fond of Victoire's name, and while initially i couldn't get over Teddy's name, I've come to accept it somewhat; it's James and Albus and Lily and Fred that I can't get over. Come on, Rowling, come on.
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(September 9th 2007, 7am)rubytuesday on chapter #50.I loved "Undeniable." I always enjoy the way you express the relationship between Sirius and Regulus; I agree that Reg would definitely resent the fact the Sirius left him (and the family in general, I suppose) rather than be happy about it, and I always sort of thought that he /would/ have tried and stopped it, unsuccessfully, obviously, and henceforth he (angrily) resented Sirius for /that/. And I completely see the whole "James Potter is your brother" line happening in the (er, fictitious) flesh.
Also really liked "Baby Names." Victoire is definitely the only Next Generation name that means anything /really/ real. Except, you know, Scorpius.
Teddy/Victoire interaction in general pleases me. =)
Author Response: I adooooore the Black brothers and their delightfully angsty relationship. I think -- and I keep meaning to write something with the two of them -- that Narcissa and Regulus are very similar in that they have this sort of family-uber-alles attitude, and rather than loathe Andromeda and Sirius for not perscribing to the same beliefs, they loathe (or try to) them for being so willing to walk out on the family. If you'll allow me a bit of self promotion, 'Splits in the Skin' deals directly with the argument I hinted at in Undeniable. And Teddy/Victoire are the only characters in the next gen that I care about, and they're totally the next Lily/James pre-OOTP.
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